From a technical point of view my main concern is that "rails" doesn't rhyme with "Spain" and "train". Because of that I have had to deduct a star from the already meagre allocation I had awarded.
The train in Spain falls mainly off the rails...
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You could try "The train in Spain goes off the rails again".
The only problem with that is that as far as I know, it has't - it only derailed once, which actually was quite bad enough. Sorry. I was only trying to help. (Do I win a prize for most unhelpful / pointless post of the week? Or is it too early, this only being Monday?)
Before you try, I should perhaps point out that
the bus in Italy cannot be treated wittily.
Very good, but perhaps scans slightly better as
The coach in Italy
Can't be treated wittily
When all's been said
There are too many dead)
notice it's still got only 1 star.
"notice it's still got only 1 star."
Probably about right.
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