Poem About How I Love You - James Watford
I can see the stars twinkling in your eyes,
The glowing sun in your smiles,
I could give you the moon,
Anything you desire,
You can be my queen,
And I can be your clown,
I could die without you
Be Realistic About That Poem - Emily Thornes
That was a lovely poem James. However, I do have a few minor quibbleds. Firstly, if I had stars in my eyes, not only would we be blinded, but we'd be roasted alive. And secondly, the stars twinkle because of winds in our atmosphere. On the ground they would not twinkle.
Secondly, if I had the sun as a smile, the same thing would happen like with the stars.
Thirdly, if you could give me the moon, assuming you could, however, you would need a doctorate and PhD in astrophysics, and a working spacecraft and lunar-caputure device in order to get me the moon. You earn £26,000 and are an office clerk. Even if you could get me the moon, just bringing it 150,000 miles away from the Earth would cause devastation, and would certainly rip humans to shreds, including us.
Fourthly, you cannot give me anything I desire. I want to be with Hugh Grant, but as I've said, you earn 26K and are an office clerk.
Fifthly, I cannot be a queen, as not only do you not have a kingdom, there already is a queen in charge of us, and I doubt you'd kill her.
Sixthly, you are not funny enough for a clown.
Seventhly, you are pretty much alive, and was before you met me, so therefore that point is too, moot.
Finally to close off, that sucked. Grammatically, and as a poem. My 6-year old nephew does better.