http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/topic.php?id=49447 The NewsBiscuit Community en-US Wed, 19 Jun 2013 04:41:23 +0000 http://bbpress.org/?v=1.0.2 q http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/search.php http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/topic.php?id=49447#post-142925 Wed, 10 Oct 2012 16:21:59 +0000 B.E.P. 142925@http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/ <p>Absolutely, and that's what a strong punchline will give you and you would get with wonga in the set up, as you still have to make a connection. But I feel this gave me more of a uh...oh. The set up is to vauge. We may disagree, and that's ok. Nice to have the conversation. </p> <p> It's a good joke, but I personally think it would be stronger. </p> http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/topic.php?id=49447#post-142924 Wed, 10 Oct 2012 16:16:53 +0000 Tripod 142924@http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/ <p><blockquote>As it reads you can not be sure what the joke is about until the end.</blockquote></p> <p>Isn't that the point (sometimes)? An "ah!" moment?? </p> http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/topic.php?id=49447#post-142923 Wed, 10 Oct 2012 16:13:21 +0000 B.E.P. 142923@http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/ <p>Yes, but you need to give enough info. As it reads you can not be sure what the joke is about until the end.</p> <p> By adding Wonga you make the story clear and give the reader a quicker and more pleasurable pay-off. xxx </p> http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/topic.php?id=49447#post-142922 Wed, 10 Oct 2012 16:09:06 +0000 Tripod 142922@http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/ <p><blockquote>It's a lot of leaping</blockquote></p> <p>But you made it... </p> http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/topic.php?id=49447#post-142875 Wed, 10 Oct 2012 12:11:26 +0000 Midfield Diamond 142875@http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/ <p>Yeah, good one. </p> http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/topic.php?id=49447#post-142836 Wed, 10 Oct 2012 09:59:11 +0000 B.E.P. 142836@http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/ <p>Nice. Being a girl I agree you need wonga reference. Just gives the reader enough info to make the leap at the end. At the moment you need to make te leap of 'newcasle, oh wonga, oh loan sharks, ah newcastle sharks. It's a lot of leaping </p> http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/topic.php?id=49447#post-142835 Wed, 10 Oct 2012 09:46:52 +0000 Tripod 142835@http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/ <p><blockquote>Probably should read "Following Wonga sponsorship deal..."</blockquote></p> <p>I thought anyone reading it could make that little leap...</p> <p><blockquote>Relief to see an actual joke floating around in a lonely sea of turds... </blockquote></p> <p>Erm... thank you. An image that will stay with me for the rest of the day... </p> http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/topic.php?id=49447#post-142832 Wed, 10 Oct 2012 09:27:34 +0000 Midnight Dreary 142832@http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/ <p>I like this, let's have it up on the ticker.<br /> Probably should read "Following Wonga sponsorship deal..."</p> <p>Relief to see an actual joke floating around in a lonely sea of turds... </p> http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/topic.php?id=49447#post-142815 Wed, 10 Oct 2012 08:30:23 +0000 Tripod 142815@http://newsbiscuit.com/forum/ <p>. </p>